八、卷面整洁

整洁美观的作文卷面能让评卷老师赏心悦目、舒畅阅读、正确评价，并赢得一定的印象分。能够让卷面整洁的方法有：1.书写端正、规范。作文卷面的每一个词最好都要写得端正，不多笔、不少笔、不张冠李戴。因此平时要不断强化和优化写词训练，力争做到又好又快。2.打好腹稿，写好提纲，想好再写。在动笔写作前，心里应盘算怎样开头、过渡和结尾，如何组织语言文字等，可以在草稿纸上写下提纲。3.小心修改，不留痕迹。如果确实写错了，补救时一定要小心，不要弄破试卷，尽量不留痕迹。

下面以2014年12月（第一套）作文、2014年6月（第一套）作文和2013年12月（第一套）作文为例，简要讲解高分范文的写作思路。

【例1】[2014-12（1）]

Directions：For this part，you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay about a campus activity that has benefited you most.You should state the reasons and write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

高分范文

A Campus Activity That Has Benefited Me Most

It is generally accepted that activities in university are very colourful.As for me，a campus activity that has benefited me most is the speech contest held when I was a freshman.It was about social responsibility.

The speech contest impresses me most with the following points.Firstly，the theme of the speech contest，relating to social responsibility，is very meaningful and this contest really helps me accumulate profound knowledge regarding the subject. Additionally，my eloquence and critical thinking abilities are remarkably improved and my stage fright is overcome.Most importantly，I made the acquaintance with one of my most valuable friends in this activity.

Generally speaking，this speech contest can be a milestone on my way of growing up as it is from then that I get the courage to speak in public without being nervous.

写作思路

使我收获最大的一次校园活动

第1段：虽然开篇可以有铺垫，但不能太长，只能一句，否则会容易跑题，第2句点明对自己益处最大的一次校园活动是什么。

…activities in university are very colourful…a campus activity that has benefited me most is the speech contest…

第2段：给出具体的理由（1.帮我积累了很多知识；

2.提高了口才和思辨能力，并且不再怯场；

3.认识了大学里最重要的一位朋友）。

The speech contest impresses me most with the following points.Firstly…Additionally…Most importantly…

第3段：总结自己的观点，呼应第1段。

Generally speaking，this speech contest can be a milestone on my way…

【例2】[2014-6（1）]

Directions：For this part，you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the following question.You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

Suppose a foreign friend of yours is coming to visit your campus，what is the most interesting place you would like to take him/her to see and why？

高分范文

The Most Interesting Place to Show My Foreign Friend on Campus

If my foreign friend comes to my campus，the most interesting place I’d like to take him/her to is the lake.

The lake is located in the north of the campus and covers a large area.With lush vegetation，elegant pavilions and old-style architecture，it is the most beautiful part of my campus.In the spring and early summer，the lake is decorated with blooming flowers；in the autumn，the lakeside is full of yellowness.

It also provides leisure and relaxation for the students and staff.You’ll hear someone recite Chinese poems or English essays by the lake，see young lovers sitting and talking leisurely on the bench and occasionally spot a squirrel quickly disappearing into the woods.

With the beautiful scenery and vitality of human activity，I believe my foreign friend will find the lake interesting and enjoyable.

写作思路

想带外国朋友去的校园里最有意思的地方

第1段：开篇点明想带外国朋友去的最有意思的地方是学校的湖区。

If my foreign friend comes to my campus，the most interesting place I’d like to take him/her to is the lake.

第2、3段：给出具体的理由（1.湖边景色秀美；2.是人们活动休憩的好地方）。

it is the most beautiful part of my campus； provides leisure and relaxation

第4段：总结自己的观点，相信外国朋友会喜欢。

I believe my foreign friend will find the lake interesting and enjoyable.

【例3】[2013-12（1）]

Directions：For this part，you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below.You should start your essay with a brief account of the impact of the Internet on the way people communicate and then explain whether electronic communication can replace face-to-face contact.You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

高分范文

The Impact of the Internet on the Way People Communicate

The ironic picture is about a father and a mother writing a letter to their son who is upstairs.The father and the mother greet the son，and tell him they are fine and miss him；they look forward to seeing him again when his computer crashes and he comes downstairs to eat.The son is overusing the Internet.From the ironic picture we can see the impact of the Internet on the way people communicate.

Can electronic communication replace face-to-face contact？As far as I’m concerned，the answer is“no”.For one thing，electronic communication makes people feel strange although it does help people communicate， especially for those who are far away or inconvenient to talk.Whereas face-to-face contact makes people feel psychologically intimate and affectionate.For another， people cannot express themselves fully through the Internet.Thus，misunderstandings may be aroused.

In my opinion，I do not object to electronic communication，but it cannot replace face-to-face communication.

写作思路

互联网对人们交流方式的影响

第1段：描述图画内容，指出图画寓意——这是一幅讽刺漫画，意在说明在人际交往中人们对于互联网的过度使用。

The ironic picture is about…From the ironic picture we can see…

第2段：指出网络交流不能取代面对面的交流，并分析原因。

Can electronic communication replace face-to_- face contact？…“no”.For one thing…For another…

第3段：总结全文，重申自己的观点——互联网不能取代面对面的交流，呼应主题。

In my opinion…electronic commu nication cannot replace face-to-face communication.