Choppy Sentence
Choppy这个词在字典中的意思是“波浪起伏的”，除此之外它还有一个意思：一段话由大量的短句、简单句构成，造成的结果是过于啰嗦。
Revised这个词在字典中的意思是"经过修订或校正的"。
先感受一下这两段中文：
1.我5:30起床。我穿衣服。我刷牙洗脸。我吃早餐。我上班去。
2.我5:30起床，紧接着我会穿衣服、刷牙洗脸、吃早餐，然后去上班。
第一句话就是一个choppy sentence，第二句话重新组合了一下就连贯了很多。
英语相比中文来说更“惜字如金”，能不重复的地方就不重复，能用一句话说清楚的别用两句 。
举一个英文的例子：
The boy asked his father a question. The boy is five years old. The question was about death.
这句话说的太啰嗦了，我们可以直接写成
The five-year-old boy asked his father a question about death.
怎么破？
1
利用连词按逻辑把句子连起来
Choppy
She took dance classes. She had no natural grace or sense of rhythm. She eventually gave up the idea of becoming a dancer.
Revised
She took dance classes, butshe had no natural grace or sense of rhythm, soshe eventually gave up the idea of becoming a dancer.
主要用到的连词有：and, but, or, nor, yet, for, so。这个方法其实就是把“简单句” （simple sentence）变成了“复合句”（compound sentence），复合句相比来说可以让我们表达更复杂的内容。
2
把其中一个句子变成“非独句”
Choppy
Bears emerge from hibernation in the spring. They wander through wetlands. They feed mainly on grasses.
Revised
Whenbears emerge from hibernation in the spring, they wander through wetlandsandfeed mainly on grasses.
这种方法的本质是把句子变成了“复合复杂句”（compound-complex sentence）：用if, when, after这样的词引导一个“非独立句”，然后再写一个完整的复合句。
3
用同位语插入
Choppy
Eric has denied an interest in running for the senate. Eric is the former governor of Minnesota.
Revised
Eric, the former governor of Minnesota, has denied an interest in running for the senate.
利用同位语很多时候比从句更加的简洁。
4
用分词，把其中一句变成修饰句
Choppy：
My aunt is very strict with my cousin. She expects her to study all the time.
Revised：
My aunt is very strict with my cousin, expecting her to study all the time.
大家可能会说，这句话可不可以变成：
My aunt is very strict with my counsin and expects her to study all the time.
最好不要这样写，因为这里有一个and，我们最好遵守“平行结构” (parallel construction)，是句子结构保持平衡。例如Eric is handsome and has good sense. 就不平衡，可以改成：Eric is handsome and sensible.
