Adding an explanation

In adding explanation, it is important to minimize the number of words which you intend to use to make sure you stay within the word limit. Look at the examples below.

1. Both cities experienced a rise in the number of tourists coming in through their airports, which reached a common level of 255,000 in July.

Reduced Form: Both cities experienced a rise in the number of tourists coming in through their airports, reaching a common level of 255,000 in July.

2. Gold bar prices experienced a spectacular rise in November, which climbed to a new peak of $625.

Reduced Form: Gold bar prices experienced a spectacular rise in November, climbing to a new peak of $625.

3. In the first half of 2009, the attendance at the museum went into free fall, which nose-dived to approximately 300,000 visitors.

Reduced Form: In the first half of 2009, the attendance at the museum went into free fall, nose-diving to approximately 300,000 visitors.

4. Females also spend less time socializing and much less time than men on sport, which allows them more time for studying.

Reduced Form: Females also spend less time socializing and much less time than men on sport, allowing them more time for studying.

Exercise: Reduce the clauses in the sentences into phrases.

1. The figures then dropped sharply to well below 5000, which was the lowest in record for more than 40 years.

2. The largest number of visitors in total came from the United States, which rose from 345 to 609 thousand.

3. Rents shot up from 11% in 1993 to 21% in 2003, which doubled over the ten-year period.

4. From the end of 2001, consumption remained unchanged with two minor peaks at the end of 2001 and 2002, which corresponded with two dips in the use of nuclear and fossil energies.

5. Email and instant messenger are close thirds and fourths in popularity, which scored 17% and 16% respectively for men, 21% and 18% for their counterparts.

6. The amount of money saved also dropped dramatically, which stepped down from 6% in 2003 to just 2% ten years later.

7. In the first two months of the year, the number of internet users reached nearly 1.5 million, which was double the estimate for the period.

8. The number of internet users soared once more during March and April, which outstripped forecasts by a wide margin.